2015 Term 2 Week 5 The deadly planet Mars!

Here is my ABCYA word cold of my writing I hope you like it and try and find a sentences that is in a paragraph.

In Week 5 of Term 2 our class focussed on how to write great information reports.

We wrote about the planet Mars as we are in the middle of learning about Planet Earth and Beyond. Learning how to write a geat information report will help us with our self-guided topics in a few weeks time.

Here is my writing, after I have self-assessed and peer-assessed my work.

THE AMAZING PLANET MARS that is very deadly

Introduction :

Have you ever wonder why people don’t live on Mars. Mars is named after the god of war Mars.

Surface features :

Mars is really red and it is earth's next door neighbor and it is a an habitable planet. Even do it is half the size earth it is really cold, there's no water only the freezing cold pools that sick into the ground like hard goalposts.Mars has the largest volcano in the hole entire solar system. Even when Mars is covered with asteroids and meteors they still go in and make it really holey holes in its red liqucked dust. Mars is with nothing on it only red dust and rocky volcanoes, the red dust cause horrible things like sand storms that can make you blinded for ever and ever. Mars is really red because, of its red dust.  

Could people live on mars :

Have you ever wonder why people can’t go on Mars? Well I’m going to tell you why we can’t live on Mars? Mars is a planet that is very cold it might seem hot but really it’s just it’s boiling red hot looks. The meteors and asteroids covering mars makes it impossible to land on that's why we can’t go no it.Mars is so cold when, it’s night colder than our night

conclusion :

I hope you have a few facts about mars our closest neighbor. This information report might won’t you to find out more about Mars and might, won't you to make your own information report. If you won’t to find out more about Mars you can go to this link: http://www.sciencekids.co.nz/sciencefacts/planets/mars.html

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My Information Report Success Criteria:	Self	Peer
My heading:
is an interesting title (I might have phrased the title as a question.)	Yes	Yes
My opening paragraph:
says what my report is about in a clear way	Yes	Yes
gives a general “classification” – and maybe a technical classification
outlines the main features of the subject	Yes	Yes
My main paragraphs:
have sub-headings where helpful	Yes	Yes
have clear topic sentences  (topic and main point)	Yes	Yes
are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject	Yes	Yes
give detailed information (factual descriptions)	Yes	Yes
include specific, technical vocabulary	Yes	Yes
are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)	Yes	Yes
may have helpful: tables, pictures and/or diagrams to add information	Yes	Yes
My end paragraph:		Yes
draws the report together/sums up my main points	Yes	Yes
may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found	Yes	Yes